Band 7.5 essay about mobile phones and young children

The following is an essay submitted by one of our students. It has not been edited and may contain spelling or grammar mistakes.

Essay topic

The dangers and complexities of the modern world have made the mobile phone an absolute necessity for children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Student’s essay

These days, we see an increasing number of children carrying mobile phones. These gadgets that were once a luxury for teenagers are becoming a necessity for younger children. One reason to this is the affordability of mobile phones these days. A more significant reason is the concern of parents over the danger and complexity of the modern world.

Mobile phones were designed to improve and break the limitations of communication. As population, traffic, and various complexities in society increases, there are concerns over safety of children. This is credited to the difficulty of communication between children and parents. Gone were the days where children could travel freely without worrying their parents. As a result, parents resort to giving their children mobile phones. This puts their mind at ease knowing that their children will be contactable in any case of emergency.

However, there are people questioning the effectiveness of mobile phones on curbing danger. Schools are generally safe for children and have payphones available when urgent communication is needed. Furthermore, allowing children to carry expensive gadgets might in fact make them vulnerable to danger. Some parents might also take the ease of communication for granted by allowing their children too much freedom. Young children are not supposed to be allowed to travel without the supervision of adults, be it teachers or parents. Giving them a mobile phone does not make them more protected.

To sum up, I do see the benefits of giving children mobile phones, but I do not agree that it is an absolute necessity. The focus should be on raising safety awareness among children through education. They should also be provided with sufficient protection and supervision. This are direct methods that should be taken to create a safe environment for children, instead of over-reliance on mobile phones.

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2 Responses

  1. ziow says:

    Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones.
    Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
    Nowadays, phones have taken an important part in our lives and definitely in the future. Moreover, how to use the phone smartly is also an intriguing topic for society. Concerning children, are they able to use phones? On a cultural level, some people believe that children must not use phones during the school day and others think they should be allowed. To me, permission to use phones during the school day is a great idea.
    Many people think children should not use phones probably due to the bad effects they have such as being addicted to games, vision-worsening, or even making bad performances in classes. Furthermore, using phones all day can make the children shy, unconfident when they socially communicate. Those who do not use carefully will be affected for sure, but we should remember that all problems can be solved directly by humans.
    What we should notice is that using technical devices like phones has lots of advantages, which outperformed their drawbacks. To illustrate the point, hundred of experiments of advanced countries like Japan, American, Russia were taken and this gave out optimistic results. Consequently, they showed that intellectually using phones can boost the children’s ability to acquire knowledge, cultivate their mental development and give them a well-rounded perspective of life.
    In my opinion, when children are allowed to use phones and get support from their teachers, they can discover new things positively, to be more likely to study on their own instead of relying on education program.
    To summarize, we know that when the pupils using phones, there will be certain risks, but we can’t deny that phones do a favor for children if they use in the right way within the probation of adults. So, let them use to see good changes.

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